Summary of M591 Coursework Article 4

Academic Year 2007/8

Highlights of the group project are:

Very good organisation and cooperation of students in the unit to complete the article within a short period of time.
The primary research results are very relevant to the article subject.
The university has sent a press release regarding the completed article.

Areas that need improvements are:

The article thesis was too much like a summary of the research findings. The thesis statement could have been more of a bold and innovative perspective about the article subject. For example, could the case study example be used to support a proposal of a completely different way for the NAO to audit the HMRC?
Section 6 with recommendations for improving data security needed additional analysis and research to identify more relevant recommendations. For example, considering that a fundamental error made by HMRC was to send data that was not requested, one of the recommendations in Section 6 should concern the practice of access/transmit on an as-needed basis.
Due to the longer length of the article, the structure needed improvements to highlight the main research findings of the article and to make a smoother transition between different ideas.
Due to having multiple contributing authors, the article needed much more revision for grammatical improvements and errors.

The following are provisional marks subject to approval at the Unit Assessment Board. The coursework assignment is available online.

Critical analysis and reflection	37
Evidence of research	26
Writing mechanics	14