The presentation document file is MISSING from the coursework submission.

Links to presentation videos MUST BE WRITTEN ON THE COURSEWORK PAGE! DO NOT write them as a comment and DO NOT write it in your presentation file.

Links to presentation videos MUST BE WRITTEN ON THE COURSEWORK PAGE! DO NOT write them as a comment and DO NOT write it in your presentation file.

Links to presentation videos MUST BE WRITTEN ON THE COURSEWORK PAGE! DO NOT write them as a comment and DO NOT write it in your presentation file.

Links to presentation videos MUST BE WRITTEN ON THE COURSEWORK PAGE! DO NOT write them as a comment and DO NOT write it in your presentation file.

Links to presentation videos MUST BE WRITTEN ON THE COURSEWORK PAGE! DO NOT write them as a comment.

The video MUST clearly indicate that you are standing to deliver the presentation. If you are not standing, then it is a FAIL mark. The video indicates that you are sitting.

I can view the video using the link and download the presentation file. It is not possible to fairly provide feedback on the presentation content this close to the due date.

As long as for most of the video, I can see and hear that it was you authentically delivering the presentation, then, the audio being out of sync at the end is not a problem.

The sample screen print does not clearly indicate that you were standing. The video must show clearly that you are standing to deliver the presentation.

You may use content not in your coursework 1 article as long as it is consistent with the coursework assignment. The video does not have to show your presentation at the same time because I will have access to the presentation file that you uploaded with your coursework submission page. Penalties will apply if the coursework submission does not meet the requirements, for example, videos that exceed 6 minutes.

The size of the video is not a problem because I can clearly see you standing to make the presentation.

You have not saved the link to your video and have not uploaded your presentation file to your coursework 2 page.

Please read the instructions on the left side of the form to upload files. It says, "Do not use file names with spaces or punctuation marks. File names are case sensitive." Your file name contains spaces and a comma, which may cause problems in some web browsers when trying to download the file.

Videos may be edited, as long as the result still meets the coursework requirements - for example, the final video still must show the student standing to deliver the presentation.

You can upload or delete files as often as you like. The final file uploaded at the due date is considered to the coursework submission. The coursework assignment page describes the document formats that are acceptable as the presentation file.

Yes, I can use the link to view the video and download the presentation file.

When an individual name is not available, then an organisational name can be used as the author. In that case, there is no surname. The reference in comment 4 is mostly correct - with 2 errors to fix: the comma after the name Netcraft should be changed to a period and only the very first letter of the article title should in uppercase. The rest of the article title should be in lowercase.

If you find images using a search engine and want to use it for decorative purposes in your presentations, you are not required to provide a citation and reference. But, do make an effort to find the source so that you can cite and reference it as a courtesy to the creator of the image. This exception is mostly to help when you just can't any information about the source of the image.

I've added a comment on your Coursework 1 coursework page.

Please read the lecture notes and the articles that have been highlighted with marks above 70%. Look at what the notes say about citations and look at how citations were used in the articles. Let me know if you have questions after you have done those 2 steps.

Yes, references must be included in the presentation file.

Yes, the presentation should use the work you've done from the article.

Coursework 2 can re-use images/graphics from Coursework 1. The reference page does not have to appear on the video if it is contained in the presentation file.

The article still does not have a title. The thesis statement or research question is still not apparent from the current headings and paragraphs. The one citation and reference has most of the correct information, but, the format of both citation and reference are still incorrect. Read the examples provided in the lecture notes.

The final saved version of your coursework page is considered to be your coursework submission. The comments are not considered to be part of your coursework submission and are not displayed to the public.

Reply to comment 9: There is some flexibility about exceeding the word count. But, articles that have an excessive word count that show the student had no regard for the coursework requirements will still be subject to a penalty. Use good judgment. Write a good article that is mindful of the coursework requirements. A bit more or less is not a problem.

Reply to comment 8: The description in paragraph 3 is sufficient. It is not necessary to go into any more detail. The thesis statement or research question is still not apparent. Compare the first 2 paragraphs with the last 3 paragraphs. How do you want the reader to relate those paragraphs together? What should they have in mind? The answer to those 2 questions would be very close to the thesis statement or research question for your article.

It is not a surprise that you are struggling to write the coursework if the first time you've looked at it was 8:44pm on Nov 29 when the due date is Dec 4. Better would have been if you asked for help at the previous lectures before the due date. At this late stage, the only suggestion I have is to read the lecture notes.

Reply to comment 4: If you log out, then, it will stop you from saving to the coursework page. It is better practice to frequently save your work as you go along. Do not wait until the last minute, in case you encounter computer problems.

References are a seperate issue from answering the coursework questions. Read the lecture notes for topic 3. Better would have been if you asked for help at the previous lectures before the due date. At this late stage, I'd suggest that you provide a citation and reference when you're uncertain whether a third party source requires a citation and reference or not.

It is better to answer the coursework question indirectly through your own thesis statement or research question.

Reply to comment 9: A low Turnitin rating is NOT a guarantee that your text does not contain plagiarism. It simply makes a comparison of your text against other text it has in its database. IT IS IMPORTANT that you make the changes I suggested in Comment 7. Otherwise, you are at risk of being charged with plagiarism and failing the coursework.

Reply to comment 8: References are NOT enough. You MUST use citations in your text to show where you used the references. Better would have been if you asked for help at the previous lectures before the due date. At this late stage, the only suggestion I have is to read the lecture notes for topic 3, which discuss and provide examples of citations and references.

Reply to comment 2: Better would have been if you asked for help at the previous lectures before the due date. At this late stage, the only suggestion I have is to read the lecture notes for topic 3, which discuss and provide examples of citations and references.

Reply to comment 3: It looks like you've learned to insert an image.

If you are sick, then please contact your personal tutor and submit an Extenuating Circumstances Form with the ENG Office as soon as possible. Hope you will feel better soon.

Read the lecture notes for topics 2 and 3. Better would have been if you asked for help at the previous lectures before the due date. At this late stage, I'd suggest that you provide a citation and reference when you're uncertain whether a third party source requires a citation and reference or not.

There are UK legislation that involve computer usage, which, in turn, use the DNS services.

Read the lecture notes for topics 2 and 3, which discuss how to identify a thesis statement or research question, which is required to focus your work.

The coursework questions are open ended because the objective is to emphasize writing skills. Your ideas in comment 2 are possible answers. You need to choose a thesis statement that can narrow the answers and tie the ideas together.

The thesis statement or research question is not a separate part of the article. Look at the lecture notes for topics 2 and 3. If you use information from a source, even if you paraphrase it, then you must add a citation and put it in the reference list.

It means that anytime you use a third party source, you must include information (citation and reference) to show that you are not claiming other people's work as your own. Look at the topic 3 lecture notes for details.

I will not be reading every draft to provide general comments. Instead, I will try to answer SPECIFIC questions until 12 noon Friday (Dec 2).

DO NOT UPLOAD the coursework as a Microsoft Word document. Edit your coursework page and save the changes in order to submit your coursework. The coursework assignment very clearly indicates that you must not upload document files.

Feedback to post 16:

• The short answers to each question could be combined into a paragraph.
• Proof read to revise incomplete sentences, such as the answer to question 3.
• Proof read to avoid spelling errors, such as the last sentence.

Feedback to post 15:

• The paragraph could be more effective by removing the numbers in the parentheses.
• Good sentence structures.
• The rhetorical question in sentence 7 would be more effective with examples of alternatives.

Feedback to post 14:

• It is a complete sentence.

Feedback to post 13:

• There were too many words with the first letter in capitals. A safe rule is that only names of a specific person, place or thing should have the first letter in upper case. Do not use it for emphasis.
• Proof read to avoid spelling errors. For example, the second sentence of the last paragraph.
• The short answers could be combined into 1 or 2 paragraphs.

Feedback to post 12:

• It is a good rhetorical question. Combine that approach with specific examples that support the answer you had in mind.

Feedback to post 11:

• The paragraphs separately answered each question, but, were not joined to work as one article.
• Good sentence structures.
• The second sentence of the third paragraph does not make sense because it was about 2 different issues.
• Proof read to avoid mistakes such as incorrectly using capital first letter for the word "Instrumental" in the second paragraph and not using capital letter for the name of the product in the last sentence of the last paragraph.

The one paragraph was too short to provide feedback, but, does look like like a potentially interesting introduction. Make sure you have a thesis statement or research question to focus the article.

The draft used good sentences and paragraphs structure. The introduction paragraph and image were effective, but the article was missing a thesis statement or research question to tie the content together. Consider if there is a specific point that you want to make based on the information you've gathered about the DNS. Then, re-write headings and focus on a thesis statement.

There were no citations, references or any evidence of research.

Response to comment 3: You can answer the coursework questions in any order. The thesis statement or research question is the primary factor in how to use the answers to the questions when writing the article.

Response to comment 2: Suggestions for research were discussed in lecture and available in the lecture notes. The suggested research sources are available on the unit website. Question 3 ask you to describe your view of the function or purpose of the DNS.

The 2 sentences and the title were too short to provide feedback.

Response to comment 4: You can answer the coursework questions in any order. The thesis statement or research question is the primary factor in how to use the answers to the questions when writing the article.

The notes and web links showed some evidence of research. But, there was no draft available for feedback. Focus on finding a thesis statement or research question from the information you've already found.

The book in your comment 3 could be a good reference, but, only if it is related to your thesis statement or research question.

The draft used good sentences, but the paragraphs need headings and white space separation.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There were no citations. The references in the comments were not included in the draft. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

The draft used good sentences and some paragraph structure. The use of bullet lists reinforced that the article was trying to answer one coursework question at a time, which indicated the absence of a thesis statement or research question to tie the content together. Consider if there is a specific point that you want to make based on the information you've gathered about the DNS. Then, re-write headings and focus on a thesis statement.

There were no citations. The references were incorrectly formatted. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

The draft was well written with good sentences and paragraphs structure. However, the content was not tied together with a thesis statement or research question. Consider if there is a specific point that you want to make based on the information you've gathered about the DNS. Then, use headings and focus on a thesis statement.

There were no citations, references or any evidence of research.

The title and 2 paragraphs did not indicate the thesis statement or research question. The format of the citations were incorrect. There was no evidence of research.

DO NOT COPY TEXT FROM OTHER SOURCES. THAT IS CONSIDERED PLAGIARISM. WRITE EVERYTHING IN YOUR OWN WORDS. There were text in the draft which were directly copied from other sources. START OVER AND WRITE A NEW ARTICLE USING YOUR OWN WORDS. It is better to write less using your own words than to write more by copying someone else.

DO NOT INCLUDE STUDENT NAMES OR ID NUMBERS. That information is already available from your login account.

There were no citations. The references are mostly correct, but, still has errors. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

Well written draft with creative thesis statement. It is a bit risky to wait until the last sentence of the article to state the thesis statement. The introduction was effective, but, it may be worthwhile to consider adding hints about the thesis statement earlier in the article. The casual writing style was a creative approach. Good draft, now work on the citations and references.

The citations and references were incorrect. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

The draft used good sentences and paragraphs structure. The image is much too large for the amount of text. There were headings, but, they did not indicate the thesis statement or research question. The citations were correctly formatted.

The reference list showed evidence of research, but, the format was confused with multiple entries and some format errors. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

The draft has some sentence structure and various technical facts. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The comments showed evidence of research efforts, but, they were not included in the draft as citations or references.

Well written draft with creative thesis statement. Add citations to indicate how the references were used in the article. Good draft, very nearly done.

The reference list was mostly correct. Use the lecture notes to check and fix the small remaining errors with the references. Double check for spelling and grammar errors. For example, look at the second sentence of the 6th paragraph.

The 3 paragraphs only provide technical information. The web links show some research effort. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent.

DO NOT UPLOAD the coursework as a RTF document. Edit your coursework page and save the changes in order to submit your coursework.

The research question is clearly conveyed in the introduction and the draft has good sentences and paragraphs. Overall, the draft showed good progress and effort. Remember to add citations and fix the references.

The research method is a chronological summary of your research. It should be related to the research question and the references used. It does not need to be long, but, it should indicate that you carried out the research.

The introduction paragraph looks promising. The remainder of the notes have some structure and show some evidence of research. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent.

The draft used good sentences and paragraphs structure. There were headings, but, they did not indicate the thesis statement or research question. The citations and reference list showed evidence of research.

DO NOT UPLOAD the coursework as a Microsoft document. Edit your coursework page and save the changes in order to submit your coursework. If you need help to upload an image, please ask for help.

The citations and reference list contained the correct information, but, with incorrect formatting. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

The draft contained short sentences, which can be combined and re-written into paragraphs. The diagrams were effective. Overall, the draft showed some progress and effort.

DO NOT INCLUDE STUDENT NAMES OR ID NUMBERS. That information is already available from your login account. Do not include the lecturer name because that is already known from the coursework assignment.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The citations and references were incorrectly formatted. For example, the reference list must be alphabetical order. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

The 4 paragraphs had some structure. The thesis statement was conveyed in the first sentence of paragraph 2. But, the second sentence of paragraph 2 made the thesis statement more vague - it should be changed or removed. The 4 web site links contained some evidence of research, but, the citations and references were incorrect. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

The draft contained mostly technical descriptions and headings directly from the coursework questions. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There was no evidence of research.

The outline did not indicate any progress or research efforts.

The 3 small paragraphs had some structure. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There was no evidence of research.

The paragraph had some structure. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The comment contained some evidence of research, but, they were not included as citations or references in the draft.

There were some structure to the 3 paragraphs. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There was 1 reference, which has formatting errors. DO NOT UPLOAD the coursework as a Microsoft document. Edit your coursework page and save the changes in order to submit your coursework.

The draft used good sentences and paragraphs structure. There were no citations, references or any evidence of research. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent.

There were some structure to the 2 paragraphs. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There was no evidence of research. DO NOT UPLOAD the coursework as a Microsoft document. Edit your coursework page and save the changes in order to submit your coursework.

The draft used good headings, paragraphs and sentence structure. There were an introduction, conclusion and effective diagram. The citations and reference list showed evidence of research. Overall, the draft showed good progress and effort.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The citations and reference list contained the correct information, but, with incorrect formatting. For example, author names should start with the surname and the reference list should be alphabetical order. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

Notes showed some research efforts. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent from the notes.

The title and 2 sentences were interesting. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There were no citations and the reference list contained the correct information, but, with incorrect formatting. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

Notes showed good research efforts. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent from the notes. Citations and reference list were not used.

The web site links and reference list showed good evidence of research. The draft was mostly single sentences without paragraph organisation. Overall, the draft showed some progress and effort.

The thesis statement is too general and should be more specific. Add paragraphs and use more specific headings. The citations and reference list were incorrectly formatted. For example, web site links need more than just the URL. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

Notes showed good research efforts, especially the list of possible titles or thesis statements at the top of the page. Just need to write the article.

The introduction and conclusion were effective at conveying the thesis statement. The draft used good headings, paragraphs and sentence structure. The reference list showed evidence of research. Overall, the draft showed good progress and effort.

There were no citations - this needs to be fixed before the final draft. The reference list contained the correct information, but, with incorrect formatting. For example, web site links need more than just the URL. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

Notes showed some research efforts. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent from the notes.

The title and introduction were effective at conveying the thesis statement. The web site links showed some evidence of research. Overall, the draft showed some progress and effort.

There were no citations and the web site links were not in the format required for a reference list. Figure 2 has technical errors. Add paragraphs and headings.

The list of websites and the few sentences showed a small amount of research. There was no other evidence of work.

The draft used good sentences and paragraphs structure. The diagrams were effective. The citations and reference list showed good evidence of research. Overall, the draft showed good progress and effort.

The thesis statement is too general and should be more specific. Add headings to indicate structure. The citations and reference list contained the correct information, but, with incorrect formatting. For example, references should not be entirely in italics and article names should not be in quotes. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

The introduction and conclusion were effective at conveying the research question. The draft used good headings and sentence structure. The citations and reference list showed good evidence of research. Overall, the draft showed good progress and effort.

The paragraphs structure was affected by partial bullet lists, which need to be resolved before the final draft. The citations were mostly correct, but, citations should not have any formatting such as italics. The reference list contained the correct information, but, with incorrect formatting. For example, author names should not be in italics and article names should not be in quotes. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.

The draft outline used headings which matched directly to the coursework questions. Sentences with headings 1 and 2 were written as bullet list format, which needs to be fixed. Sentences with heading 3 showed a better structure.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent from the outline or conclusion. There were no citations or references to show evidence of research.

The draft showed some information listed against each question in the coursework. But, the information was not organised into a single article.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There was a list of websites (displayed twice, once at top and again at the bottom of the page), but, there were no citations or references.

The draft contained only an introduction paragraph, which had some sentence structure. There was no other evidence of work.

The draft used good sentences and paragraphs structure.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The 3 website links used an incorrect citation format. There was no other evidence of research. The headings need some type of formatting.

The draft outline with headings showed a good structure.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent from the outline or conclusion. The one website link in the introduction did not use the correct citation format. There were no citations or references to show evidence of research. The title and headings should not be all capital letters.

The draft (at the top of the page) contained a good introduction and used good sentences and paragraphs structure.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The quotes and website links (at the middle and bottom of the page) showed evidence of research, but, they need to be added to the article as proper citations and references. Add a blank line to separate each paragraph.

The draft contained only an introduction paragraph, which had spelling errors (e.g. electrol). There was no other evidence of work.

The draft (at the bottom of the page) contained interesting, but incomplete, information.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The sentences and paragraphs lacked structure. The quotes and website links (at the top and middle of the page) showed evidence of research, but, they need to be added to the article as proper citations and references. Add a blank line to separate each paragraph.

The draft contained mostly correct technical facts. There was a basic introduction. The sentences and paragraphs have some structure.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There was evidence of research in the comments, but, they need to be added to the page as proper citations and references. The title should not be all capital letters. Add a blank line to separate each paragraph.

The size refers to the capacity. For example, how many machines or components are involved in the operation of the system. It does not refer to the length of the domain names.

The example with the mobile phone is a good way to write the introduction. You could combine the 2 paragraphs together.

The idea for the introduction is very good! It could be improved with grammar changes. For example, use one question mark. There is no need to use 2 question marks for emphasis. Instead, use bold or italics for emphasis. Combine sentences to form an introduction paragraph. Use white space (such as an empty line) to separate paragraphs.

Feedback to post 8:

• There should be a space after the period at the end of a sentence.
• The first 3 paragraphs are short. They may be more effective combined into a single paragraph to discuss usage of tablet computers.
• The 4th paragraph is very different from the first 3 paragraphs and would need its own heading.
• The ideas in the 4th paragraph do not have a direct link to the topic of tablet computers.

If it was the coursework, the student would need to think more about using headings to organise the structure of the article so that each heading has a direct link to the thesis statement or the research question.

Feedback to post 7:

• Avoid using the same phrase to start consecutive sentences. For example, "The intrinsic value", was found in the first 2 sentences.
• The second paragraph has good opening and closing sentences.

The second paragraph contains claims that have many opposing opinions. For example, "government spending does not provide economic growth". If it was the coursework, the student would need to find supporting research evidence. It would also be useful to research contrary opinions in order to anticipate different reader perspectives.

Information is generally correct. The organisation of the article needs improvement. Review your headings, you will find that they do not provide much information about your own opinions and do not help the reader link one topic to the next topic. Look at the notes for different ideas to organise your headings, e.g. chronological, process, priority, etc.

Do NOT put your name, student ID number or email in the coursework. That is already available through your login.

The definition is generally in the right area. There are technical errors in the first 2 sentences. The third sentence is a good way to think about the function of DNS.

Put comment 1 directly into your coursework page because it looks like you're starting to work on the introduction.

Feedback to post 3:

• Good sentence structures.
• The last sentence was starting a new set of ideas and should be moved into a separate paragraph.

Feedback to post 2:

• Good use of white spaces and paragraphs.
• Be careful of the use of singular and plural forms. The word, "phrases", in this sentence should have been in singular form, "The phrases 'if it isn't broken, don't fix it' is something that comes up in my mind."
• The "NHS computer system" example needs more supporting information.
• The "important documents have been left in public places" example could be more effective by mentioning a specific example from the news.
• It is better to have less points, which are well developed and supported, than to have more points, but with less support.
• The third paragraph attempts to convey a complex issue. In those situations, a better approach may be to narrowly focus on one aspect (e.g. upgrade costs) or to start with a specific example (e.g. NHS computer system).
• Resist the temptation to write phrases which we use when talking in person. For example, the last paragraph did not need the phrase, "see my previous statement".

The writing showed that the student was starting to think about the topic and was starting to form a personal position about the topic. If it was the coursework, the next step for the student would have been to research other (possibly contrary) perspectives about the topic. That research would help anticipate different reader views and help the student write better support of their own opinions.

Feedback to post 1:

• Good attempt to compare advantages and disadvantages. But, the writer did not choose a position at the end.
• Avoid unnecessary words and phrases, especially phrases which we may say when talkin. For example, this sentence, "In this report I am going to be discussing one the main areas that surround the world of sustainable tablet computing." could be reduced to "This report will discuss one area of sustainable tablet computing.".
• Be careful to check for words that sound the same. For example, this word, "weather" will pass the spell checker, but, it is incorrect in this sentence, "This area is weather the government should provide financing to companies who produce and manufacture a sustainable tablet computer." The correct word is "whether".
• Be careful when using comparisons and adjectives. For example, the word "huge" in this sentence would need a lot of evidence to make it believable, "This would be a huge advantage to both the company and staff as they would have more efficient working practice." One possible approach is to not use superlatives. For example, the sentence could be re-written as "Tablets may provide an advantage to both the company and staff by enabling efficient working practices." Another approach is to use superlatives and include supporting evidence. For example, the sentence could be re-written as "Research published by the Confederation of British Industry (CBI) shows a huge advantage to both the company and staff as they would have more efficient working practice."
• Avoid using the forward slash to separate alternative words for the same concept. For example, this sentence, "In this small report I will be looking at both the pros/advantages and the cons/disadvantages of this situation." could be reduced to "This report will look at the advantages and disadvantages of the situation."
• The last 3 sentences of the conclusion were drifting away from the topic of tablets and becoming too general. Remember to keep your writing as close as possible to your thesis statement or research question.

The writing showed that the student was starting to think about the topic and was successful at finding information. If it was the coursework, the next step for the student would have been to write drafts as a way to choose a smaller subset of the information for further research and revision.

You should post everything as you go along. This is evidence of your own work and an indication of your progress. Then, use the comments to ask when you have questions.

The introduction is good. Remember to check that it is related to your thesis statement or research question.

Those references seem incomplete. Which entry or pages at those websites did you use?

Put the note directly into your page so that it is easier to put together your draft. Keep the source reference information in the comments part until you need it for citations or the reference list.

That is possible. There are other choices available. The lecture notes for report writing includes ideas for an introduction and examples from other reports. We will also discuss it in lecture.

You can put notes from your research directly into your coursework page.