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The Technology Context – B101

B101 Feedback comments to students

Academic year 2011/12



Students have individual coursework pages in which they may write notes as they develop their coursework assignments. They are encouraged to use the commenting feature to write questions as they work. The unit lecturer can post feedback using the same commenting feature. Comments written by each student is private.

The list below contains feedback comments written by the unit lecturer, but, without any student information. It is provided in case other students have similar questions.

Comment 120   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The presentation document file is MISSING from the coursework submission.
Comment 119   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Links to presentation videos MUST BE WRITTEN ON THE COURSEWORK PAGE! DO NOT write them as a comment and DO NOT write it in your presentation file.
Comment 118   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Links to presentation videos MUST BE WRITTEN ON THE COURSEWORK PAGE! DO NOT write them as a comment and DO NOT write it in your presentation file.
Comment 117   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Links to presentation videos MUST BE WRITTEN ON THE COURSEWORK PAGE! DO NOT write them as a comment and DO NOT write it in your presentation file.
Comment 116   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Links to presentation videos MUST BE WRITTEN ON THE COURSEWORK PAGE! DO NOT write them as a comment and DO NOT write it in your presentation file.
Comment 115   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Links to presentation videos MUST BE WRITTEN ON THE COURSEWORK PAGE! DO NOT write them as a comment.
Comment 114   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The video MUST clearly indicate that you are standing to deliver the presentation. If you are not standing, then it is a FAIL mark. The video indicates that you are sitting.
Comment 113   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
I can view the video using the link and download the presentation file. It is not possible to fairly provide feedback on the presentation content this close to the due date.
Comment 112   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
As long as for most of the video, I can see and hear that it was you authentically delivering the presentation, then, the audio being out of sync at the end is not a problem.
Comment 111   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The sample screen print does not clearly indicate that you were standing. The video must show clearly that you are standing to deliver the presentation.
Comment 110   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
You may use content not in your coursework 1 article as long as it is consistent with the coursework assignment. The video does not have to show your presentation at the same time because I will have access to the presentation file that you uploaded with your coursework submission page. Penalties will apply if the coursework submission does not meet the requirements, for example, videos that exceed 6 minutes.
Comment 109   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The size of the video is not a problem because I can clearly see you standing to make the presentation.
Comment 108   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
You have not saved the link to your video and have not uploaded your presentation file to your coursework 2 page.
Comment 107   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Please read the instructions on the left side of the form to upload files. It says, "Do not use file names with spaces or punctuation marks. File names are case sensitive." Your file name contains spaces and a comma, which may cause problems in some web browsers when trying to download the file.
Comment 106   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Videos may be edited, as long as the result still meets the coursework requirements - for example, the final video still must show the student standing to deliver the presentation.
Comment 105   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
You can upload or delete files as often as you like. The final file uploaded at the due date is considered to the coursework submission. The coursework assignment page describes the document formats that are acceptable as the presentation file.
Comment 104   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Yes, I can use the link to view the video and download the presentation file.
Comment 103   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
When an individual name is not available, then an organisational name can be used as the author. In that case, there is no surname. The reference in comment 4 is mostly correct - with 2 errors to fix: the comma after the name Netcraft should be changed to a period and only the very first letter of the article title should in uppercase. The rest of the article title should be in lowercase.
Comment 102   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
If you find images using a search engine and want to use it for decorative purposes in your presentations, you are not required to provide a citation and reference. But, do make an effort to find the source so that you can cite and reference it as a courtesy to the creator of the image. This exception is mostly to help when you just can't any information about the source of the image.
Comment 101   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
I've added a comment on your Coursework 1 coursework page.
Comment 100   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Please read the lecture notes and the articles that have been highlighted with marks above 70%. Look at what the notes say about citations and look at how citations were used in the articles. Let me know if you have questions after you have done those 2 steps.
Comment 99   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Yes, references must be included in the presentation file.
Comment 98   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Yes, the presentation should use the work you've done from the article.
Comment 97   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Coursework 2 can re-use images/graphics from Coursework 1. The reference page does not have to appear on the video if it is contained in the presentation file.
Comment 96   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The article still does not have a title. The thesis statement or research question is still not apparent from the current headings and paragraphs. The one citation and reference has most of the correct information, but, the format of both citation and reference are still incorrect. Read the examples provided in the lecture notes.
Comment 95   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The final saved version of your coursework page is considered to be your coursework submission. The comments are not considered to be part of your coursework submission and are not displayed to the public.
Comment 94   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Reply to comment 9: There is some flexibility about exceeding the word count. But, articles that have an excessive word count that show the student had no regard for the coursework requirements will still be subject to a penalty. Use good judgment. Write a good article that is mindful of the coursework requirements. A bit more or less is not a problem.
Comment 93   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Reply to comment 8: The description in paragraph 3 is sufficient. It is not necessary to go into any more detail. The thesis statement or research question is still not apparent. Compare the first 2 paragraphs with the last 3 paragraphs. How do you want the reader to relate those paragraphs together? What should they have in mind? The answer to those 2 questions would be very close to the thesis statement or research question for your article.
Comment 92   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
It is not a surprise that you are struggling to write the coursework if the first time you've looked at it was 8:44pm on Nov 29 when the due date is Dec 4. Better would have been if you asked for help at the previous lectures before the due date. At this late stage, the only suggestion I have is to read the lecture notes.
Comment 91   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Reply to comment 4: If you log out, then, it will stop you from saving to the coursework page. It is better practice to frequently save your work as you go along. Do not wait until the last minute, in case you encounter computer problems.
Comment 90   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
References are a seperate issue from answering the coursework questions. Read the lecture notes for topic 3. Better would have been if you asked for help at the previous lectures before the due date. At this late stage, I'd suggest that you provide a citation and reference when you're uncertain whether a third party source requires a citation and reference or not.
Comment 89   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
It is better to answer the coursework question indirectly through your own thesis statement or research question.
Comment 88   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Reply to comment 9: A low Turnitin rating is NOT a guarantee that your text does not contain plagiarism. It simply makes a comparison of your text against other text it has in its database. IT IS IMPORTANT that you make the changes I suggested in Comment 7. Otherwise, you are at risk of being charged with plagiarism and failing the coursework.
Comment 87   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Reply to comment 8: References are NOT enough. You MUST use citations in your text to show where you used the references. Better would have been if you asked for help at the previous lectures before the due date. At this late stage, the only suggestion I have is to read the lecture notes for topic 3, which discuss and provide examples of citations and references.
Comment 86   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Reply to comment 2: Better would have been if you asked for help at the previous lectures before the due date. At this late stage, the only suggestion I have is to read the lecture notes for topic 3, which discuss and provide examples of citations and references.
Comment 85   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Reply to comment 3: It looks like you've learned to insert an image.
Comment 84   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
If you are sick, then please contact your personal tutor and submit an Extenuating Circumstances Form with the ENG Office as soon as possible. Hope you will feel better soon.
Comment 83   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Read the lecture notes for topics 2 and 3. Better would have been if you asked for help at the previous lectures before the due date. At this late stage, I'd suggest that you provide a citation and reference when you're uncertain whether a third party source requires a citation and reference or not.
Comment 82   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
There are UK legislation that involve computer usage, which, in turn, use the DNS services.
Comment 81   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Read the lecture notes for topics 2 and 3, which discuss how to identify a thesis statement or research question, which is required to focus your work.
Comment 80   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The coursework questions are open ended because the objective is to emphasize writing skills. Your ideas in comment 2 are possible answers. You need to choose a thesis statement that can narrow the answers and tie the ideas together.
Comment 79   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The thesis statement or research question is not a separate part of the article. Look at the lecture notes for topics 2 and 3. If you use information from a source, even if you paraphrase it, then you must add a citation and put it in the reference list.
Comment 78   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
It means that anytime you use a third party source, you must include information (citation and reference) to show that you are not claiming other people's work as your own. Look at the topic 3 lecture notes for details.
Comment 77   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
I will not be reading every draft to provide general comments. Instead, I will try to answer SPECIFIC questions until 12 noon Friday (Dec 2).
Comment 76   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
DO NOT UPLOAD the coursework as a Microsoft Word document. Edit your coursework page and save the changes in order to submit your coursework. The coursework assignment very clearly indicates that you must not upload document files.
Comment 75   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Feedback to post 16:

Comment 74   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
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Comment 73   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
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Comment 72   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
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Comment 71   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
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Comment 70   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Feedback to post 11:

Comment 69   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The one paragraph was too short to provide feedback, but, does look like like a potentially interesting introduction. Make sure you have a thesis statement or research question to focus the article.
Comment 68   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft used good sentences and paragraphs structure. The introduction paragraph and image were effective, but the article was missing a thesis statement or research question to tie the content together. Consider if there is a specific point that you want to make based on the information you've gathered about the DNS. Then, re-write headings and focus on a thesis statement.

There were no citations, references or any evidence of research.
Comment 67   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Response to comment 3: You can answer the coursework questions in any order. The thesis statement or research question is the primary factor in how to use the answers to the questions when writing the article.
Comment 66   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Response to comment 2: Suggestions for research were discussed in lecture and available in the lecture notes. The suggested research sources are available on the unit website. Question 3 ask you to describe your view of the function or purpose of the DNS.
Comment 65   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The 2 sentences and the title were too short to provide feedback.
Comment 64   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Response to comment 4: You can answer the coursework questions in any order. The thesis statement or research question is the primary factor in how to use the answers to the questions when writing the article.
Comment 63   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The notes and web links showed some evidence of research. But, there was no draft available for feedback. Focus on finding a thesis statement or research question from the information you've already found.
Comment 62   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The book in your comment 3 could be a good reference, but, only if it is related to your thesis statement or research question.
Comment 61   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft used good sentences, but the paragraphs need headings and white space separation.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There were no citations. The references in the comments were not included in the draft. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 60   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft used good sentences and some paragraph structure. The use of bullet lists reinforced that the article was trying to answer one coursework question at a time, which indicated the absence of a thesis statement or research question to tie the content together. Consider if there is a specific point that you want to make based on the information you've gathered about the DNS. Then, re-write headings and focus on a thesis statement.

There were no citations. The references were incorrectly formatted. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 59   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft was well written with good sentences and paragraphs structure. However, the content was not tied together with a thesis statement or research question. Consider if there is a specific point that you want to make based on the information you've gathered about the DNS. Then, use headings and focus on a thesis statement.

There were no citations, references or any evidence of research.
Comment 58   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The title and 2 paragraphs did not indicate the thesis statement or research question. The format of the citations were incorrect. There was no evidence of research.
Comment 57   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
DO NOT COPY TEXT FROM OTHER SOURCES. THAT IS CONSIDERED PLAGIARISM. WRITE EVERYTHING IN YOUR OWN WORDS. There were text in the draft which were directly copied from other sources. START OVER AND WRITE A NEW ARTICLE USING YOUR OWN WORDS. It is better to write less using your own words than to write more by copying someone else.

DO NOT INCLUDE STUDENT NAMES OR ID NUMBERS. That information is already available from your login account.

There were no citations. The references are mostly correct, but, still has errors. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 56   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Well written draft with creative thesis statement. It is a bit risky to wait until the last sentence of the article to state the thesis statement. The introduction was effective, but, it may be worthwhile to consider adding hints about the thesis statement earlier in the article. The casual writing style was a creative approach. Good draft, now work on the citations and references.

The citations and references were incorrect. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 55   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft used good sentences and paragraphs structure. The image is much too large for the amount of text. There were headings, but, they did not indicate the thesis statement or research question. The citations were correctly formatted.

The reference list showed evidence of research, but, the format was confused with multiple entries and some format errors. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 54   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft has some sentence structure and various technical facts. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The comments showed evidence of research efforts, but, they were not included in the draft as citations or references.
Comment 53   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Well written draft with creative thesis statement. Add citations to indicate how the references were used in the article. Good draft, very nearly done.

The reference list was mostly correct. Use the lecture notes to check and fix the small remaining errors with the references. Double check for spelling and grammar errors. For example, look at the second sentence of the 6th paragraph.
Comment 52   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The 3 paragraphs only provide technical information. The web links show some research effort. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent.

DO NOT UPLOAD the coursework as a RTF document. Edit your coursework page and save the changes in order to submit your coursework.
Comment 51   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The research question is clearly conveyed in the introduction and the draft has good sentences and paragraphs. Overall, the draft showed good progress and effort. Remember to add citations and fix the references.

The research method is a chronological summary of your research. It should be related to the research question and the references used. It does not need to be long, but, it should indicate that you carried out the research.
Comment 50   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The introduction paragraph looks promising. The remainder of the notes have some structure and show some evidence of research. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent.
Comment 49   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft used good sentences and paragraphs structure. There were headings, but, they did not indicate the thesis statement or research question. The citations and reference list showed evidence of research.

DO NOT UPLOAD the coursework as a Microsoft document. Edit your coursework page and save the changes in order to submit your coursework. If you need help to upload an image, please ask for help.

The citations and reference list contained the correct information, but, with incorrect formatting. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 48   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft contained short sentences, which can be combined and re-written into paragraphs. The diagrams were effective. Overall, the draft showed some progress and effort.

DO NOT INCLUDE STUDENT NAMES OR ID NUMBERS. That information is already available from your login account. Do not include the lecturer name because that is already known from the coursework assignment.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The citations and references were incorrectly formatted. For example, the reference list must be alphabetical order. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 47   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The 4 paragraphs had some structure. The thesis statement was conveyed in the first sentence of paragraph 2. But, the second sentence of paragraph 2 made the thesis statement more vague - it should be changed or removed. The 4 web site links contained some evidence of research, but, the citations and references were incorrect. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 46   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft contained mostly technical descriptions and headings directly from the coursework questions. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There was no evidence of research.
Comment 45   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The outline did not indicate any progress or research efforts.
Comment 44   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The 3 small paragraphs had some structure. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There was no evidence of research.
Comment 43   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The paragraph had some structure. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The comment contained some evidence of research, but, they were not included as citations or references in the draft.
Comment 42   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
There were some structure to the 3 paragraphs. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There was 1 reference, which has formatting errors. DO NOT UPLOAD the coursework as a Microsoft document. Edit your coursework page and save the changes in order to submit your coursework.
Comment 41   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft used good sentences and paragraphs structure. There were no citations, references or any evidence of research. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent.
Comment 40   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
There were some structure to the 2 paragraphs. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There was no evidence of research. DO NOT UPLOAD the coursework as a Microsoft document. Edit your coursework page and save the changes in order to submit your coursework.
Comment 39   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft used good headings, paragraphs and sentence structure. There were an introduction, conclusion and effective diagram. The citations and reference list showed evidence of research. Overall, the draft showed good progress and effort.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The citations and reference list contained the correct information, but, with incorrect formatting. For example, author names should start with the surname and the reference list should be alphabetical order. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 38   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Notes showed some research efforts. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent from the notes.
Comment 37   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The title and 2 sentences were interesting. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There were no citations and the reference list contained the correct information, but, with incorrect formatting. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 36   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Notes showed good research efforts. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent from the notes. Citations and reference list were not used.
Comment 35   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The web site links and reference list showed good evidence of research. The draft was mostly single sentences without paragraph organisation. Overall, the draft showed some progress and effort.

The thesis statement is too general and should be more specific. Add paragraphs and use more specific headings. The citations and reference list were incorrectly formatted. For example, web site links need more than just the URL. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 34   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Notes showed good research efforts, especially the list of possible titles or thesis statements at the top of the page. Just need to write the article.
Comment 33   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The introduction and conclusion were effective at conveying the thesis statement. The draft used good headings, paragraphs and sentence structure. The reference list showed evidence of research. Overall, the draft showed good progress and effort.

There were no citations - this needs to be fixed before the final draft. The reference list contained the correct information, but, with incorrect formatting. For example, web site links need more than just the URL. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 32   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Notes showed some research efforts. The research question or thesis statement was not apparent from the notes.
Comment 31   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The title and introduction were effective at conveying the thesis statement. The web site links showed some evidence of research. Overall, the draft showed some progress and effort.

There were no citations and the web site links were not in the format required for a reference list. Figure 2 has technical errors. Add paragraphs and headings.
Comment 30   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The list of websites and the few sentences showed a small amount of research. There was no other evidence of work.
Comment 29   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft used good sentences and paragraphs structure. The diagrams were effective. The citations and reference list showed good evidence of research. Overall, the draft showed good progress and effort.

The thesis statement is too general and should be more specific. Add headings to indicate structure. The citations and reference list contained the correct information, but, with incorrect formatting. For example, references should not be entirely in italics and article names should not be in quotes. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 28   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The introduction and conclusion were effective at conveying the research question. The draft used good headings and sentence structure. The citations and reference list showed good evidence of research. Overall, the draft showed good progress and effort.

The paragraphs structure was affected by partial bullet lists, which need to be resolved before the final draft. The citations were mostly correct, but, citations should not have any formatting such as italics. The reference list contained the correct information, but, with incorrect formatting. For example, author names should not be in italics and article names should not be in quotes. Use the lecture notes to check each reference format.
Comment 27   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft outline used headings which matched directly to the coursework questions. Sentences with headings 1 and 2 were written as bullet list format, which needs to be fixed. Sentences with heading 3 showed a better structure.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent from the outline or conclusion. There were no citations or references to show evidence of research.
Comment 26   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft showed some information listed against each question in the coursework. But, the information was not organised into a single article.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There was a list of websites (displayed twice, once at top and again at the bottom of the page), but, there were no citations or references.
Comment 25   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft contained only an introduction paragraph, which had some sentence structure. There was no other evidence of work.
Comment 24   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft used good sentences and paragraphs structure.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The 3 website links used an incorrect citation format. There was no other evidence of research. The headings need some type of formatting.
Comment 23   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft outline with headings showed a good structure.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent from the outline or conclusion. The one website link in the introduction did not use the correct citation format. There were no citations or references to show evidence of research. The title and headings should not be all capital letters.
Comment 22   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft (at the top of the page) contained a good introduction and used good sentences and paragraphs structure.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The quotes and website links (at the middle and bottom of the page) showed evidence of research, but, they need to be added to the article as proper citations and references. Add a blank line to separate each paragraph.
Comment 21   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft contained only an introduction paragraph, which had spelling errors (e.g. electrol). There was no other evidence of work.
Comment 20   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft (at the bottom of the page) contained interesting, but incomplete, information.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. The sentences and paragraphs lacked structure. The quotes and website links (at the top and middle of the page) showed evidence of research, but, they need to be added to the article as proper citations and references. Add a blank line to separate each paragraph.
Comment 19   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The draft contained mostly correct technical facts. There was a basic introduction. The sentences and paragraphs have some structure.

The research question or thesis statement was not apparent. There was evidence of research in the comments, but, they need to be added to the page as proper citations and references. The title should not be all capital letters. Add a blank line to separate each paragraph.
Comment 18   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The size refers to the capacity. For example, how many machines or components are involved in the operation of the system. It does not refer to the length of the domain names.
Comment 17   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The example with the mobile phone is a good way to write the introduction. You could combine the 2 paragraphs together.
Comment 16   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The idea for the introduction is very good! It could be improved with grammar changes. For example, use one question mark. There is no need to use 2 question marks for emphasis. Instead, use bold or italics for emphasis. Combine sentences to form an introduction paragraph. Use white space (such as an empty line) to separate paragraphs.
Comment 15   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Feedback to post 8:


If it was the coursework, the student would need to think more about using headings to organise the structure of the article so that each heading has a direct link to the thesis statement or the research question.
Comment 14   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Feedback to post 7:


The second paragraph contains claims that have many opposing opinions. For example, "government spending does not provide economic growth". If it was the coursework, the student would need to find supporting research evidence. It would also be useful to research contrary opinions in order to anticipate different reader perspectives.
Comment 13   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Information is generally correct. The organisation of the article needs improvement. Review your headings, you will find that they do not provide much information about your own opinions and do not help the reader link one topic to the next topic. Look at the notes for different ideas to organise your headings, e.g. chronological, process, priority, etc.
Comment 12   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Do NOT put your name, student ID number or email in the coursework. That is already available through your login.
Comment 11   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The definition is generally in the right area. There are technical errors in the first 2 sentences. The third sentence is a good way to think about the function of DNS.
Comment 10   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Put comment 1 directly into your coursework page because it looks like you're starting to work on the introduction.
Comment 9   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Feedback to post 3:

Comment 8   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Feedback to post 2:


The writing showed that the student was starting to think about the topic and was starting to form a personal position about the topic. If it was the coursework, the next step for the student would have been to research other (possibly contrary) perspectives about the topic. That research would help anticipate different reader views and help the student write better support of their own opinions.
Comment 7   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Feedback to post 1:


The writing showed that the student was starting to think about the topic and was successful at finding information. If it was the coursework, the next step for the student would have been to write drafts as a way to choose a smaller subset of the information for further research and revision.
Comment 6   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
You should post everything as you go along. This is evidence of your own work and an indication of your progress. Then, use the comments to ask when you have questions.
Comment 5   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
The introduction is good. Remember to check that it is related to your thesis statement or research question.
Comment 4   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Those references seem incomplete. Which entry or pages at those websites did you use?
Comment 3   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
Put the note directly into your page so that it is easier to put together your draft. Keep the source reference information in the comments part until you need it for citations or the reference list.
Comment 2   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
That is possible. There are other choices available. The lecture notes for report writing includes ideas for an introduction and examples from other reports. We will also discuss it in lecture.
Comment 1   by Moderator   @ 1970-01-01 00:00
You can put notes from your research directly into your coursework page.